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Hello,

Here is a smoking poster I have been recently working on in Photoshop. I was just wondering if anyone could tell me if they like it, or if they have any suggestions on how I can improve upon it.

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What's with all the white streaks in the background? Is that supposed to be paint? Seems kinda out of place.

The red font you chose over the dark background is sort of hard to read. It doesn't stand out, which is what you want in a poster.


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if you can dont put red text on black background makes it hard to read. and the red text you have there has to much going on with it.. i.e. the bevel and emboss. remember simple sells. Also the background is to busy as Kash said.. it just does not seem to flow with the art work you are trying to put together.

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honest critique...

i agree with Kash about the font/color, mainly about the red, how it looks on the background and whatever sort of shadow/outline effect there is on it - the blue is much better.
i do get what you're doing with the red and blue, as a before/after sort of thing - that does work.

i'm with Kash also on the stray stuff in the background. i don't think it adds. more is definitely not more in this case. what is your thought on why it's there?

the thing that bothers me most is the image of the woman. as much as smoking puts me off, the pic itself seems sort of glamorous and in a way comforting, sort of a port in the storm that is the rest of the pic. maybe if she was in silhouette? or had a nasty crosshatch overlay (minus the other stray marks on the back -on a solid background, it may be more powerful).

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It looks like the woman is seducing the cigarette.

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Okay time to be super nit picking. >_<"

You need to resolve the color scheme it's not working.

No stroking the type please.

Not sure what's going on with the lady's hair towards the back it looks like she got a bad haircut.

Pick typefaces that have been time tested for readability, especially since this is for a poster.

Why are there flames shooting out of her shoulder? I know that's not what you want. Move things around so it doesn't look like that.

The white slashes is not working. They are taking away from everything else. Tone them down...the background is not suppose to be more important than the foreground and the typography.

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Here is an updated version:
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I would get rid of the stroke and effects on the type.
Keep the text color white for all... no gradients, strokes, shadows, highlight, glows...etc.
Simpler is better.

The second smoke wisp by the phrase "put the smoke out" seems out of place... it's just there. I would advise getting rid of it.

I would also loose the flame image. At the very least, reverse the image of the woman so the light from the flame looks like it is creating the light on the side of her face.
The way it is set now makes no sense, since the side with the bright fiery flames seem to be casting a shadow on that side?

Better yet, just get a different photo for the woman. As was pointed out, it makes smoking look glamorous. I know that's not what you want to convey.
Find an image of a less attractive person, perhaps... something along the lines of This poster.
I know that is a bit more extreme that you would require for your purpose, but it does work for that poster since the over the top "ugliness" is used to enhance the irony of that poster's message.

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Here is an idea I have been playing with for this project... It's a different one that the fire. I just got the idea, so it is in the early stages.

Let me know what you think.
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I think your second idea looks better.

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Both you second version's look much better. The more 'white space' there is, the easier it is to read.


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On your first idea 2nd edition. I think you switch the colors of the type. IE make it black and have just the word "flames" in red. Get rid of the white outline on the type it's is not necessary.

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